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A poem, comments please?

Postby hillocke » Mon Apr 11, 2011 10:34 am

Apprehension tastes of bitter concern…
Showered down by waters,
From brambly embrace.
Your eyes of winter,
Mountain snow, show,
The slightest bit of warmth,
Shining Innocence like the sun.
And I know…
And you know…
The lion cub you lust to hold,
Dwells beyond the boundaries of youth,
A sheet you no longer stand in,
An attire so over due amongst this life.
You are slanderous to my stance,
You are libelous to my walk…
But your sharped tongue appetite,
keeps your lion mane in play.
hillocke
 
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Postby brenn15 » Mon Apr 11, 2011 10:35 am

That's really good. I like it.
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Postby erwin » Mon Apr 11, 2011 10:40 am

I very much like this, though it speaks of pain, and hope as if in one breath.

Would I change a couple of things? Perhaps, but that would not assume to change your sense you felt in sharing. Thank you so much.
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Postby pete » Mon Apr 11, 2011 10:57 am

To me this expresses a tremendous longing, for the thing to hold, that love, that youth, that child come to term. Very nice A++
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Postby matchitisiw » Mon Apr 11, 2011 10:59 am

To me this expresses a tremendous longing, for the thing to hold, that love, that youth, that child come to term. Very nice A++
hello dear it was very nice i like it .
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